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Identity is a misnomer.

There were two men living in an apartment. One’s name was Alex Parker, the other was Alex Pitman. Pitman had many friends, while Parker did not.

When people called their house, they often requested Pitman. When people stopped over, they always wanted to see Pitman. The fact that there was another Alex in the house did not prevent them from addressing Pitman as “Alex.” As you can imagine, this got very confusing for Parker.

Then one day, Parker stopped responding to his first name altogether. He assumed that when people said “Alex,” they naturally meant Pitman. He stopped reacting when people said his name. He didn’t react to anyone anymore.

Eventually, Parker’s own friends would stop by. They asked if Alex wanted to hang out and watch the football game. Parker would tell them that Alex is at work right now, and shut the door. He stopped filling out his first name on documents, and only wrote “Parker.” If anybody at work wanted him to do anything, they had better luck screaming “Hey you!” than using his name.

After a few more months, Parker told Pitman he was moving out of the apartment. He got a job offer in another state that was four hours away. He said goodbye, and took what few items he had left.

Pitman lived in that apartment for another six months. Towards the end, he decided to look Parker up to see how he was doing. He looked in a few phonebooks, called a few friends, but was unsuccessful in finding a phone number. Finally, he looked up Alex Parker on the internet, and damned if there weren’t a thousand people listed.

“I’m sure he’s doing fine,” Alex sighed.
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:iconmichel-le-fou:
Jack, you done it again, dude. Great opener to start, "identity is a misnomer." I loved that. The explanatory writing about Alex Parker dispensed with his first name until he was almost unknown even on the Internet was a good sample of literary irony. Your setting and story were well-developed, in the best sense of a fiction writer. I would like to see this as a narrative poem too. You should consider a few ideas: 1. write it as a poem, in traditional sense but as a free verse. 2. re-submit it to any group, and 3. submit it to my group, #literatureforall. Well-done as usual.
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This was a pretty good piece. I liked the part where Parker would ignore even his own friends when they asked for Alex. I guess it just really shows how pissed off and sick he was of people mistaking him for somebody else. Like he was almost invisible. I guess he even started to act that way when he wouldn't respond if people called him Alex. Kind of like a self fulfilling prophecy.

The ending sort of hammers the nail into the coffin. There are thousands of Alex Parkers out there and our Parker has further faded into anonymity. And then Pitman resigns himself to saying he's fine, when he probably wasn't. He wasn't even fine when he was living with Pitman.

All in all it was pretty good. Keep writing!
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I really liked this. I'm sure people can relate to having a friend who has more friends than they do. I loved the ending though, about there being thousands of Alex Parkers. Very well done, I liked it :D
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:iconbunnyfroofroo:
I really love your work, as always. This one was a little painful to read only because I could relate a little to Parker, but it made it powerful. As far as the writing goes: great! I have one suggestion though:
Then one day, Parker stopped responding to his first name altogether. He assumed that when people said “Alex,” they naturally meant Pitman. He stopped reacting when people said his name. He didn’t react to anyone anymore.
-The bolded parts seem very redundant, I actually had to read it again because I thought it my head instead of the page.
Overall: Wonderful! Keep up the great works :D
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*SMAdams Jan 24, 2013  Student Writer
This was a very interesting piece. I enjoyed the thought processes of "Parker" throughout the piece, but overall, I had this feeling of disjointedness. Though, this might have been purposeful in a way, I think that there is a bit of a limit for it depending on the piece. I would love to see this expanded a bit, perhaps a bit more "emotion" brought into it with a bit more depth. (if that makes any sense)

Just my thoughts. :rose:
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Mood: Joy ~EbonKing Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I was looking for an disjointed but constructive point at the end, I thought Pitman would be the only one to call Parker "Alex". Anyhow I enjoyed the ending, gets you thinking, if that was the purpose, you made it distinguishly. Epic work from Philosophy, might try to read it a bit more times.
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