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Mr. Abbine, I'm going to show you a few pictures. I want you to identify the people for me.

"I'll do what I can."

Can you tell me who this is?

"That's my good for nothing neighbor. He sits around his deck and smokes all day. Then he goes inside and probably gets high from pot or something stupid like that. I'll bet that guy is living off Welfare, the scumbag. Don't even get me started on the whore he keeps around-"

Mr. Abbine, please try to keep your answers focused on the subject. Can you identify this woman for me?

"That's my mother. She calls me three times a day to complain about how something 'isn't as great as it used to be.' I once told her she sounded old, and she started crying. Then she started calling me more often. Even though I've moved out twenty years ago, that woman continues to be a drain on my life."

Very good. This younger gentleman, tell me about him.

"That's Gary. He's a needy pain-in-the-ass. I swear, he follows me around work all day. Every day, with this guy. I try my best to ignore him, but I suppose something's wrong with my generation."

And this group of people?

"Co-workers. They're either incompetent, or they're kissing the boss's ass, or both. I went to a party with a bunch of them, all I could manage was to sit in the corner. There was lousy music, lousy food… lousy people, the lot of them."

How about this group?

"Some old friends from college. I go bowling with them every week. They seem to think that college never ended, you know? I never really liked hanging out with them, but I did anyway. I just… felt like being a part of a group, I didn't care about what group that was. I swear, I outgrew them as soon as I met them."

Ok, this is the last one.

"…Him. He's… no good. He sets himself above the rest of the world, and uses that as an excuse to isolate himself. He's alone. He's… really alone. He'll die alone, too. Every woman he sees, he asks himself if she's smart enough, if she's good enough for him. She'll never be good enough by those standards. His friends see him as a human being. He sees his friends as tools to fill some "social meter" that exists only in his mind. In reality, the people around him are just… better than he is. They're happier, more successful, and he's just a petty bastard."

Mr. Abbine, I want to thank you for doing this interview with me. Goodbye.
I am not Mr. Abbine.
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Given 2012-10-29
~jackgunski offers us a great way to study a specific character in Mr. Abbine Speaks. ( Suggested by AlexanderPaupoff and Featured by neurotype )
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HeyCicada Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist
The picture at the top worked.
A very good commentary.
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MistySensation Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Is it just me, or does Mr. Abbine resemble Holden Caulfield?
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Mango-Gato Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012
when i read gary's i thought i was reading about pokemon...
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BluestarzStrike Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The last one must be Mr. Abbine describing himself :|
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Vane401 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very interesting!!
hmmm I will just think that last person might be the reader or Mr. Abbine himself.
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WhIppIng-b0y Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012
It's really good, but I'm a little confused. Is there a deep underlying message that I'm supposed to get here, or something that I'm meant to think about after reading this, or...what?
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MissPinks Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
sounds like my sister ha ha
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ProtanopicAcid Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ha, brilliant.
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SilencedMi6 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
Wake up call if I've ever seen one.
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Katashi-Okenuth Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
very true.
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Kuneria Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I'm so glad this got a DD! This is exactly what I wish everyone would realize. People should not have a bad attitude about anyone! Never look down upon anyone else, it's nothing but a defense mechanism that will only do harm in the long run. Saying that other people are lousy, or putting yourself above everyone else by putting them down DOES NOT make ANYONE look cool in anyway. People need to stop being so stubborn! They need to forgive, and learn to see the light in everyone else. Kindness and trust may be scary, but ending up alone is even scarier.

:heart: thank you so much for sharing this! it was very deep.

I used to be Mr. Abbine, but I've learned the hard way how this can effect me. But now I'm an improved person.

<3
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Monochrome0 Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think of this is a really great piece :D But I don't think he was making this for the sake of people being nicer to each other. As an artist, he didn't go that far.
He only addressed that people who really do look quite negatively on others and have overly high standards might want to become self-aware, and not a step further. The fact that you looked into it like that and connected it is quite remarkable :D It is a very powerful poem.

I am still Mr. Abbine, and I realize that.

I need to change.
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lyssaLuv Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
I see a lot of people saying this is great and creative, and while in some respects it is, from a writing perspective I thought it was obvious from the beginning where the whole thing was going. (Not trying to pat myself on the back or anything.) I think it could use more context towards the mentioned "interview" and less repetitive/obvious examples of Mr. Abbine's perception of others so that the end hits home more. Context for the interview could provide more insight for Mr. Abbine's character without plainly stating it, and it could also leave the reader asking questions which would be a beneficial thing assuming this piece is meant to make one reflect. Same goes for what I said about the numerous examples leading in a straight line to the obvious ending. If you want the reader to think, they need to be intrigued and impacted, not have everything laid out in front of them. I like the idea, which is why I wrote this whole comment to begin with - I'd love to see better execution for the concept.
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neurotype Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
If you have examples of this, I'd love to see them :eager:

Haha, I like the fact that it's not completely solid that Mr Abbine is the final picture. I mean, that's the direction the mind goes, but the author has left that ambiguous too.
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Xeshaire Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I like how it's all written together, but it's still not really clear to me, what's the real meaning behind this whole interview? I'm still trying to figure it out. D: Also congrats on the DD! <3
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rredenvous Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Digital Artist
At the end he sees a picture of himself.
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Xeshaire Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ohh~ Thanks for telling.
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rredenvous Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Student Digital Artist
glad to provide :la:
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tdog8193 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Great short read! Though, I became a little worried about myself at the end... But never-the-less, awesome little piece of literature!
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spiderpride Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Photographer
Very clever I like!!!!
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Scartei Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Perfection.
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MayRoco Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The last part is just like me in some ways,maybe Mr Abbine don't have many hope in people and in his relationships and his heart become a rock that no one can reach..nobody is good for him including himself.
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Darth-Sparrowhawk Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's amazing how much you can learn about a character, just by hearing them talk about other people, regardless of who those 'other people' might be.
An excellent exercise in getting to know a character.
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Mrs-SaxoBeat Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I deeply enjoyed reading this! It's simple yet contains a profoud and most likely universal meaning/message. I'm sure there are more people than we realize who can relate to this man's situation. It certainly gave me food for thought :)
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liark2z Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
wow, nice writing, I can image what character is Mr. Abbine I think, I have watched all his adventures, but Im not sure, It can be only me :)
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crashmypartyhard Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
this is very good writing, and i hope to see more when i look through your gallery. (:
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The-Lost-Hope Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student General Artist
Really makes you think about how you view other people, and yourself.
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Trueform Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
A really lovely piece that's as thought-provoking as it is sad. I saw this piece as Mr. Abbine talking to himself all the way through, asking himself what he thought about the others in his life and coming to the realization that he was the person with the most faults and problems.

I like to see hope where I can, so in the last paragraph I like to think this is Mr. Abbine confronting himself and coming to the realization that he needs to be a better person, giving himself the motivation to do so through the eyes of others.
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illusionality Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'M A MR. ABBINE~!! :crying:
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Journie Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I sure hope people don't see me as a Mr. Abbine. I'm kind of an introvert but not because I hate everyone :P
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Izz-noxfox Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Professional General Artist
I think that it's nicely conducted and perfected by the fact Mr. Abbine speaks of himself in third person in the last paragraph as we quickly guess the last photo will be of him. It's also an intersting piece to remind us that we also exist through the others, how they see us, how we see them, how we are in society.

I hope you'll get some more comments, it's hard to be a writer nowadays with people growing less and less capable of focusing on something for more than 3 seconds.
Congrats on the DD :)
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CrystalofSin Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Professional Photographer
Poor Mr. Abbine. He lives on Earth, the worst planet EVAH D :
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SeeSamSketch Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student General Artist
Thought provoking. Realistic dialog, too.
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Sauhegan Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
I read this and I fear that I may be Mr. Abbine.
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Iutu Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
deep. I really found myself in it :)
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kaikaku Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's so sad.
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Mayuato Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
A sad story. But you write really beautifully, it really made me think for a while.
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thestjohnlady1 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
I read that the last man he had to describe was himself; not sure if that's what was meant to be or just me ~ but I really liked this writing.
I had no background or idea about any of it; which can sometimes help!
Brilliant piece or writing hun; well done x
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DawnWolf22 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
Mr. Abbine sounds mean!!!!!!!!! [link]
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X-Italy-Fan-X Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student General Artist
wow.. i hope I'm not Mr.Abbine either
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ZeDybbuk Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
Powerful.

Thank you.
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NanamiKobayashi Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist
wow..it was short but really expressive, I love it :D
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Lynvana Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
Love this so much you don't even understand.
It put an odd mood in perspective, and I really adore the ending. Glad to see such a creative piece show up as a Daily Deviation.
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why-so-seri0us Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful! I love how the last part is about him! :) At least l THINK it's about him....
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TotusPanton Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
While I know how frustrating single word comments can be, I really don't think much more can be said besides "powerful".
This was elegantly written, to say the least.
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DarthAislin Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
I hope I'm not the only one who thinks "...Him." is Mr. Abbine talking about himself. >->
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Marzipan-x3 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
No, You're not the only one - I though the same while reading ; ) Amazing piece, very well-written! :heart:
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DarthAislin Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
Oh yes it is >w<
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Marzipan-x3 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012
:high five: ; 3
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kalic00 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
don't worry, you aren't
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