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Turn down the frigging music!
For the record,
I wear noise cancelling earphones
And they look silly,
And they do nothing against your bass.
Your bass shakes the damn walls!
Stop banging on the walls!
I’m trying to write a peace treaty
In here, and if I don’t focus,
I’ll end up starting a nuclear war!
And I’ll blame my next door neighbor,
Who couldn’t wait until 8:00 am
To hang up a stupid poster!
Stop smoking weed all damn day!
You suck, and you smell like suck!
And you suck the clear air
Out of the room!
And your suck sucks the suck into
My room like a damn suck vortex!
And you suck! You suck! You suck!
Stop playing that awful music!
Nobody needs to hear the N word
From all the way down the hall!
It’s awkward, and you make us
ALL feel awkward!
Nobody has ever organically
Sworn that much! It’s unnecessary,
And you’re unnecessary!
Stop doing these things,
And I’ll stop shouting this crap all day!
I’ll stop complaining
And we can live our lives!
We can be normal again!
Don’t you want to be normal again!
For the record,
I wear noise cancelling earphones
And they look silly,
And they do nothing against your bass.
Your bass shakes the damn walls!
Stop banging on the walls!
I’m trying to write a peace treaty
In here, and if I don’t focus,
I’ll end up starting a nuclear war!
And I’ll blame my next door neighbor,
Who couldn’t wait until 8:00 am
To hang up a stupid poster!
Stop smoking weed all damn day!
You suck, and you smell like suck!
And you suck the clear air
Out of the room!
And your suck sucks the suck into
My room like a damn suck vortex!
And you suck! You suck! You suck!
Stop playing that awful music!
Nobody needs to hear the N word
From all the way down the hall!
It’s awkward, and you make us
ALL feel awkward!
Nobody has ever organically
Sworn that much! It’s unnecessary,
And you’re unnecessary!
Stop doing these things,
And I’ll stop shouting this crap all day!
I’ll stop complaining
And we can live our lives!
We can be normal again!
Don’t you want to be normal again!
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Additionally, pretend my language isn't as friendly.
Additionally, pretend my language isn't as friendly.
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(I found this work through the "Unappreciated Works" section of #TheCritiquables)
Each stanza, by itself, seems like a reasonable complaint against un-neighborly neighbors, albeit with a bit of pent-up anger behind the words. When put all together, I see these words coming from someone who might have all sorts of personal problems in his/her life, and looks to blame his neighbors instead of trying to attack the problems at the root. I was gonna add a comment about the level of exaggeration in each stanza, but I realize now that if one was aiming to crescendo the effect, the stanzas seem out of order. I'd expect that "suck suck suck" paragraph to be second-to-last because it's the voice of someone who's so frustrated they can't even find meaningful words to describe their feelings.
Each stanza, by itself, seems like a reasonable complaint against un-neighborly neighbors, albeit with a bit of pent-up anger behind the words. When put all together, I see these words coming from someone who might have all sorts of personal problems in his/her life, and looks to blame his neighbors instead of trying to attack the problems at the root. I was gonna add a comment about the level of exaggeration in each stanza, but I realize now that if one was aiming to crescendo the effect, the stanzas seem out of order. I'd expect that "suck suck suck" paragraph to be second-to-last because it's the voice of someone who's so frustrated they can't even find meaningful words to describe their feelings.